Cyrus Adding Detail To Sentences

Adding Detail To Sentences

WALT: add detail to sentences

You can add to the

beginning

middle

end

of simple sentences.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

At Camp Bentzon Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach which I needed on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course up high in the forest.

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I was nervous about sailing on camp.

When I saw the sailing boat I was nervous about sailing on camp.

I was nervous because it was scary sailing on camp.

I was nervous about sailing on camp because I might fall out of the boat.

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We went abseiling.

On Thursday during the day we went abseiling.

We went with Brendon to abseiling.

We went abseiling on a big wall.

Cyrus Maui And The Fish

Kawau Island

I am so looking forward to go to Kawau Island next year.SWIMMING, ADVENTURE PLAYGROUND, KAYAKING, SAILING, ROWING, ORIENTEERING and ruft making. I really want to do kayaking it is the best because you can kayak to an island.

Rousie

Kelly Saves

On one sunny Sunday morning kelly went riding on her four wheel bike .Kelly went with her Dad to the shed to milk the cows. Kelly's Dad told Kelly to get the hose and wish the floor and that will be your last job for today.

Kelly has finish all jobs but suddenly she heard a whisper “help help.” Kelly did not know at first but now she does it was a sheep calling for help. Kelly went to look around for the sheep but she could not find it.

Kelly went to tell her Dad if he has seen any sheep, Kelly’s Dad replied “ yeah I saw one at the paddock” thanks Dad said Kelly. Going super fast on her four wheel bike to save the sheep it was Kelly. Kelly could see the sheep being chased by a Huntaway dog. Kelly chased the dog away and took the sheep back to the shed.

The sheep went to the shed happy and safe and Kelly went home happy at she has saved a sheep from a dog. So Kelly and the sheep lived happily ever after.

The Accident

One sunny day Sam went for a ride on his new four wheel bike on the farm. Showing off to Jordan,Jerome and Sally who got some rocks and started to throw them at Sam, but they keep on missing.

Sam went uphill and downhill until he came toward a big hill.Sam went up and came back down he tried again and again until he said to himself I can do it.Sam went so fast that when he go to the top he fell over his bike was stuck on his leg.

Sam cried out loud “help help” Sam’s Dad saw Sam on the hill stuck.Sam’s dad said “Sally go and call the westpac helicopter,Jordan and Jerome come with me” Jordan said “why do we have to go,it his fault he was being a show off” Dad said “just came with me,there they go lets go help them.” westpac helicopter arrived at the seen the westpac people,Jordan,Jerome and Dad pushed  the bike of Sam’s legs.

The westpac people put Sam into the westpac helicopter.They went to the Auckland hospital.Sam back at home after a few months.So Sam learnt a lesson to never to show off.So Sam live happily ever after.                                                                                                      

The Pig

One windy day there were three pigs who on a farm in Miami. They were walking around the farm,suddenly they saw big wave coming toward. Running for their lives they jump on a wood.

Floating around the farm the three pigs jump on the roof of the shed. They were scared “help help” said the mother pig. the were really hungry.

Another big wave coming toward like a plan almost pushing them of the roof.The water got higher and higher until it hit my leg.

Suddenly we could hear a boat noise,it my the farm I was so relieved. The pig went away happy and safe.

Sally and the Cheese

This is my presentation about making cheese.

Jessie Big Day

On one sunny morning, Jessie the ewe was out in the open paddock with all her friends. Jessie and all her friend were eating the fresh green grass and feeling nice and warm in their big wooly fleeces.

Jessie was eating  the green grass, suddenly she saw a Huntaway and an Eye dog. Jessie was filled with fear. Last time the vicious dogs came they chased her all round the paddock. The two dogs said “I am so excited I just want to chase the ewes again.”

“Oh those vicious dogs are going to chase us again.” Jessie said “friends stand in formation and run for your lives. That Huntaway is going to kill us just don’t stop running until you get to the sheep shed.

“Man I hate this time of year” Jessie said standing outside, “do you remember what happened last year, the farmer cut me?” Jessie’s BFF Sally said “come down, just try not to kick that is how you get cut.”

Standing outside she could hear shearers shear the sheep.Jessie tried to run away but the two  vicious dogs were standing at the back of the line blocking them.

Jessie could hear her other friend trying to run away from the shearers. It was Jessie’s  turn, the shearers caught Jessie on the legs when she was trying to run away.The shearers flapped Jessie on her back so the shearers started the shear clip ZZZZZZZZZZZ

The shearers started cutting the wool off. Jessie cried out loud “help help this man is going to kill me”. All the wool was cut off and had been turn into a blanket.

After the shearers was finish he throw Jessie down the tunnel.Jessie was happy that it was finish.Jessie was running around the open paddock saying “i'm free i'm free” so Jessie lived happy ever after.

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Beauty and the Beast

This is a recording of an interview with the characters Beauty and with the Beast.

The TV interview show gets the story of what happened from them both so that the public know how  they ended up married together.

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WALT - describe the main character

         - plot the decisions the character makes and their consequences.

The Boy Who Cried Wolf

This is my Rubric Score

Rhyming Couplets

A Couplets is a to-line poem. The last of each line must rhyming.

I very was glad
To have a dad

I saw so bee
In a big tree

I saw some rocket
In my pocket

Reading Interview

Cyrus Reading Interview from Team 4 Pes on Vimeo.

Pt England School Cross Country

My Introduction

I can’t believe the big day has arrived! It was our school cross country. I got ready and had a big healthy breakfast ready for my race.

Paragraph about: waiting,nervous

I was racing in the 10 years old boys. We arrived at the court and we had to line up in our age group .We had to wait really long while we had to sit on the court . When I was sitting on the count I was really nervous my heart was pounding. I was shaking with fear.

Paragraph about: lining up at the star

It was our turn to race. I was really nervous my heart was pounding. Mrs Jarman called the 10 year old boys up. Mrs Jarman told us to go and line up at the line were Mr burnt was waiting.Mr Burt told us were to go.

Paragraph about: Maddy course with puddles

When I was running I step in the mud it made me showdown. I was really lucky that I did not have my shoes on. The gooey mud oozed through my toes. When I step in the puddles I got my school shout wet.

Conclusion that makes my message clear

The Pt England school cross country was easy to run because I have been training for the big run.When I finished my run I was really proud of my efforts.I was really tired after the school cross country.

Speech Marks

WALT - use speech marks to show direct speaking.

Fill in the Speech Marks:

Hibernates, said “the fox again.” “It means that he goes to sleep for the whole winter.”

“I am tired” the Hare said and then drifted off to sleep.

“Is that what you were after?” asked Sally.

“That’s incredible.” “He must be the laziest creature alive.” said the hare.

Cyrus Jack And Magic Harp

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Jake And The Magic Harp Hat

Speech Marks

WALT - use speech marks to show direct speaking.

Fill in the Speech Marks:

“Good morning,” said the check-out lady. “Do you have your Fly Buys card?”

“I am tired the boy” said and then drifted off to sleep.

“What do you want to do when you grow up” said John.

“I don’t know” replied Dan “I might be a pilot.”

Jack And The Magic Harp

130 Pt England Rd   Point England Auckland 1072 Dear Mum, I am really sorry for selling the cow for something I wanted.Please forgive me for the wrongs I have done I will not do it again. I wanted to buy the bee and the harps for you and me to have I thought it will be fun for the both of us. please do not punish me I will not do it again. Thank you Jack

Cyrus The Three Little Pigs

Once upon a time there were three little pigs. They were all grown up and ready to seek their own fortune. They said “goodbye mum” and went to seek their own fortune.

The first little pig decided to buy some hay to build his house. The little pig gave some money to a man who own some hay. The little pig found a nice place to build his house. So the little pig went to build his house it was finished the little pig went to relax.

The big bad wolf smelt something tasty for dinner. The big bad wolf said “little pig little pig let me in”. The little pig said “not by the hairs of my chinny chin chin”. So the wolf said “I’ll huff  and I’ll puff and I’ll blow your house down” the hay went flying everywhere. The little pig tried to run away but the wolf ate the little pig.

The second little pig wanted to build his house with stick. He saw a man with some stick he gave the man some money the little pig found a great place to build his house. The little pig built his house and was really pleased with himself. So the little pig relax.

The big bad wolf smelt something really tasty.The big bad wolf said “little pig little pig let me in”. The pig said “not by the hairs of my chinny chin chin”. So the wolf said “I’ll huff  and I’ll puff and I’ll blow your house down” the stick went flying everywhere. The little pig tried to run away but the big bad ate the little pig.

The third little pig was the smartest. The little pig saw a man with some brick. So the little pig gave some money to the man. The little pig found a great spot in the sun. It took long for the little pig to finished. Finally it was done and the little pig was pleased with it.

The big bad wolf smelt something tasty. The big bad wolf said “little pig little pig let me in”. The pig said “not by the hairs of my chinny chin chin”. So the wolf said “I’ll huff  and I’ll puff and I’ll blow your house down”.The big bad wolf tried to blow the brick house down.

The big bad said “I need a new plan”. So the big bad wolf saw a chimney. The big Bad wolf went down the chimney .The little pig put a pot of hot water on the chimney The big bad wolf went down and into the pot and that was the end of the big bad wolf.

So the little pig live happily ever after.

NBA Lebron James VS Blake Griffin

Lebron James is going is going and steps Blake Griffin and gets a dunk?This is the NBA playoff championship when two team fight for the championship cup LA clippers vs Miami Heats.Lebron James vs Blake Griffin for the MVP of the year cup.

The 1st quarter has started lebron goes for two point and he gets it in how it is blake turn he goes for a three point and gets blocked by Lebron and gets a run away and gets a big dunk.How it is the 2nd quarter blake gets the first two point how Lebron  goes for a three point and gets it in.

How it onto the 3nd quarter Lebron gets a dunk over blake how blake gets a three point in Lebron with two point in.How it is the 4th quarter it even 5 seconds left Lebron goes for a three point and it is in it is over Miami Heats has won their 2nd MVP cup Lebron has won the player of the year cup.

Cyrus Antarctica

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Cyrus writing goal

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Things I am good at in writing is using lots of juicy words. I am also good with writing paragraphs about things I know about. I need to focus while fixing up my mistakes in my stories and making my sentences make sense. In term 3 my goals are to not talk, add lots of detail and edit carefully.

Jay Ninja of lightning

Title: Jay Ninja of lightning

Author: Greg Farshtey

Characters (Jay,his team,lightning

Setting ( on the ship

What was the problem? samukai had finally stolen three of the four weapons of spinjitzu

What was the solution? jay and his friends were unable to pursue

Was there a plot twist? they do not have their weapons

My favourite part of the book was?

If I could change the ending it would end like this? they could not get their weapons book

Would I read this book again?yes

Illustrate your favourite scene in the story.

PENGUINS

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State Of Origin GO QLD

He’s going he's going and he score a try and the crowd goes wild! Do you know what i’m watching tonight? A corporations called state of origin it when they chose players from the NRL there are to team the blue team is called New South Wales the the red team is called Queensland the games come on TV 3 times a year.

    

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Cyrus Story

Stumbling across the icy antarctic a man name Greg Inglis.He was walking until a snowball came right at him so he ran for his life he saw a icy cave so he ran into the cave.It was night time so he went to sleep it was really cold.

It was really chilly that Greg Inglis almost froze to death.morning came and Greg Inglis was still sick so he walked to the boat but it was broke.So he tried to build a new boat.

So he find some wood from his old boat he got some string.He put everything together and it made a boat.It was time to go to in the boat to go to find another boat to take Greg Inglis home.

When he was in his little boat he saw a big boat called the titanic.He was waving his flag he made so the boat ame to save him.So Greg Inglis lived happy ever after.

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Cyrus Voyage to the Cold South

Antarctica

In Antarctica it is like an icy desert and the temperature is extremely cold.The wind is really strong that you can get blown of your feet .The largest desert in the world is Antarctica because the wind will push you away fast that’s why and the wave are dangerous to swim inside the cold water if you do the ice inside the water can freeze you.

A killer whale is really dangerous because they eat mammals who lives in Antarctica are the biggest mammals in the world.They travel around the world to find some food.

Antarctica Sea

I lerned that in the Antarctica sea that the deeper you go the colder it get.

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What The....?

one day I was walking home then it started to rain so I looked up and saw a pair of shoes suddenly I saw a massive elephant.So I run as fast as I could and when I got home I called 111. so they came in a fire engine so I show them where the elephant so they go the ladder out and climbed the ladder but it did not work so they called the helicopter to help so they put a rope around the elephant and life and it work so they took the elephant back to the zoo.

Cyrus Omaru Creek Animation

I am sharing this for you to learn about Omaru creek. Please leave some feedback.

Cyrus Omaru Creek

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Cyrus Wet Tent

When I woke up in the morning I stretch my arm out suddenly.The side of my tent were wet.As well as my sleeping bag and my pillow and my to other friends woke up because there sleeping bay and pillow got wet and that happen two times in a row.so I just went back to sleep and then Mr Burt called and said wake up all campaigner time for jump jam so I run to the hall because it was cold.

Cyrus Sleeping In a Tent

In my tent I was sleeping with three people and it was cool because it was their first time in a tent just like me. When I was sleeping in my tent for the first time it was uncomfortable because the walls were dripping because it was really wet and my bag got wet. I hoped it wouldn't happen again but it was really cool sleeping in a tent.

My Maths Strategy Movie

I solved this problem by using rounding and compensation. Please leave some feedback.

Camp 2013

This morning I woke up  and got all my things into the car.I also had to say goodbye to my family and they wished me all the best for camp. So on the way to school for camp I said goodbye and we came to school for my school camp.

When I got out of the car I went to sit with my team. The first thing we did was kayaking. It was really cool when I jumped into the kayak. When I went with Paula it was really cool. I wish I can do kayaking again.

 

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