Stumbling across the icy antarctic a man name Greg Inglis.He was walking until a snowball came right at him so he ran for his life he saw a icy cave so he ran into the cave.It was night time so he went to sleep it was really cold.
It was really chilly that Greg Inglis almost froze to death.morning came and Greg Inglis was still sick so he walked to the boat but it was broke.So he tried to build a new boat.
So he find some wood from his old boat he got some string.He put everything together and it made a boat.It was time to go to in the boat to go to find another boat to take Greg Inglis home.
When he was in his little boat he saw a big boat called the titanic.He was waving his flag he made so the boat ame to save him.So Greg Inglis lived happy ever after.
I really liked your story Cyrus. I loved that he was so clever to be able to make a raft to sail to safety. In your writing next week lets talk about how we can use some other words other than 'so'. You have used 'so' a lot and it becomes repetitive. This is easy to fix and we can work on this together. I would love a picture to go with your story next time to.
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