Cyrus Adding Detail To Sentences

Adding Detail To Sentences

WALT: add detail to sentences

You can add to the

beginning

middle

end

of simple sentences.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

At Camp Bentzon Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach which I needed on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course up high in the forest.

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I was nervous about sailing on camp.

When I saw the sailing boat I was nervous about sailing on camp.

I was nervous because it was scary sailing on camp.

I was nervous about sailing on camp because I might fall out of the boat.

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We went abseiling.

On Thursday during the day we went abseiling.

We went with Brendon to abseiling.

We went abseiling on a big wall.

Cyrus Maui And The Fish

Kawau Island

I am so looking forward to go to Kawau Island next year.SWIMMING, ADVENTURE PLAYGROUND, KAYAKING, SAILING, ROWING, ORIENTEERING and ruft making. I really want to do kayaking it is the best because you can kayak to an island.

Rousie

Kelly Saves

On one sunny Sunday morning kelly went riding on her four wheel bike .Kelly went with her Dad to the shed to milk the cows. Kelly's Dad told Kelly to get the hose and wish the floor and that will be your last job for today.

Kelly has finish all jobs but suddenly she heard a whisper “help help.” Kelly did not know at first but now she does it was a sheep calling for help. Kelly went to look around for the sheep but she could not find it.

Kelly went to tell her Dad if he has seen any sheep, Kelly’s Dad replied “ yeah I saw one at the paddock” thanks Dad said Kelly. Going super fast on her four wheel bike to save the sheep it was Kelly. Kelly could see the sheep being chased by a Huntaway dog. Kelly chased the dog away and took the sheep back to the shed.

The sheep went to the shed happy and safe and Kelly went home happy at she has saved a sheep from a dog. So Kelly and the sheep lived happily ever after.

The Accident

One sunny day Sam went for a ride on his new four wheel bike on the farm. Showing off to Jordan,Jerome and Sally who got some rocks and started to throw them at Sam, but they keep on missing.

Sam went uphill and downhill until he came toward a big hill.Sam went up and came back down he tried again and again until he said to himself I can do it.Sam went so fast that when he go to the top he fell over his bike was stuck on his leg.

Sam cried out loud “help help” Sam’s Dad saw Sam on the hill stuck.Sam’s dad said “Sally go and call the westpac helicopter,Jordan and Jerome come with me” Jordan said “why do we have to go,it his fault he was being a show off” Dad said “just came with me,there they go lets go help them.” westpac helicopter arrived at the seen the westpac people,Jordan,Jerome and Dad pushed  the bike of Sam’s legs.

The westpac people put Sam into the westpac helicopter.They went to the Auckland hospital.Sam back at home after a few months.So Sam learnt a lesson to never to show off.So Sam live happily ever after.